So what is the plotline? Basically, it's about a girl Erin who lives in a dystopian society where a) everyone gets assigned their jobs at birth and b) all red heads are extinct and for some reason everyone hates/is scared by the thought of them (don't ask why because I haven't figured it out yet). Basically, she sees a red head... And her brothers see a red head. They are all running because they are afraid that someone will find out that they saw one. But then that exact red head catches up with her and tells her that she needs her help. For reasons that I don't know yet. And I'm still currently figuring out how the jobs assigned bit comes in. I know it will, but I need to figure it out. I need to figure a LOT of things out. Here's what I know so far:
- There will be NO rebellion involved. I want to show the more realistic side of things in my novel, and let's admit it... 16 year olds heading up rebellions isn't very realistic. It will be hinted at, but I don't plan to feature it.
- The main plotline, which is already above.
- That I want it to be set in a futuristic Australia. For some reason, all dystopias are set in America. Pfffttt. Why set it there when we have a much better country right here?
AND NOW FOR SNIPPETS!
A girl was lying in front of her, breathing so gently she wondered if she was breathing at all. Erin’s gaze travelled up her, taking in the pale white flesh, torn, bruised and bloody; her beautiful purple gown, so extravagant and beautiful she wondered if it was just a dream. It was hiked up a little, showing the frothy petticoats underneath, like whipped cream. Finally, she came to the face, staring into her sapphire eyes. And then she looked at her hair.
And let out a scream so loud, every bird within 50 metres disappeared.
That girl in front of her, the one with the oh so creamy skin and that gorgeous gown?
She had red hair.
Erin wanted to stay longer. She wanted to see how the girl would react when she woke up, in a world that would kill her before she could say ‘strawberry blonde’. She wanted to see if her eyes were as magnificent and beguiling as her hair, her outfit.
But, most importantly, she wanted someone to talk to.
Someone who would listen to every last complaint she had, who wouldn’t care if Erin spent hours talking about all her problems instead of listening to people whinge about theirs. She wanted more. More, more, more. More than this insipid life, sucking all the soul out of her. She wanted to leave this town, and it’s people.
She wanted… A life. More than just starving slowly to death, with nothing but raspberries to keep her alive.
She fed Sarah her raspberry, and from the green tongue poking out it was obvious she’d been eating grass again. She hated the thought of her beautiful sister eating the food that cows ate, but in desperate times, it was all she had.
Sooooo, what do you think? I would seriously appreciate some feedback because, let's face it, I probably need it. And I've also decided... You guys are going to name the red head! Yeah! Comment below with a name of any kind, and I'll either a) pick my favourite or b) go with the most popular. I hope you liked this post, and remember to comment with your name/comment suggestions!